Health is total content in one's life, Roxanne’s dedication and passion to bodybuilding provides her with happiness, which allows her to stop seeking approval from other as many do not support her lifestyle, while patrick Bateman’s search for perfection has left him a crazed maniac with fixated with impressing those around him.
Patrick Bateman uses his body as a tool to gain social status. He seeks out perfection in every sense of the word, including his physical appearance. (clip) Bateman has a long complicated morning routine which many would consider obesity and tedious. Bateman to the general public seems as a male adonis. He seems to have everything; the perfect body, hair, apartment, and job. But on the inside he is a disturbed individual with dark and sinister thought. His body helps him attract women intends torture, if he was attractive not well dressed and unfit he would not be able to get women to accompany to his apartment so easily.
Since Patrick is not happy unless he is one upping someone whether it be comparing business cards to associates Paul Allen and Luis Carruthers, he choses women he could have control over and impress consistently. This would explain his choice in the high priced escort “Sabrina” and the corner street prostitute “Christie”. To prove his dominance and superiority he gives the women new names. Bateman and the two women engage in sexual activity and the screen then shows the women leaving you cans see both have scratches and are bleeding on their backs and Sabrina has a bloody nose, both women rush out the door as Bateman pays them in cash. It is inferred that Bateman mutilated them with a coat hanger. His money, good looks and attire allowed the women to feel more at ease and at the beginning the women felt almost lucky as they were in luxurious apartment, and were even treated to wine.
Even though Christie was treated so terribly she agrees to meet with him again as he promises “it won't be anything like last time”, which in twisted pun is true as this time he intends to kill.
Roxanne Edwards body completely challenges the notion of health. Health for women would be considered being slightly muscular, or being thin. Many women strive to be lean tall amazonian like hence Victoria's secret models or some may opt for a curvier body such as the kardashians. Kim kardashian has made her mark on pop culture due to her sex tape and her large buttocks. Her impact can be scene as 11,505 buttock augmentations were completed in 2015 according to The american society of plastic surgeons. Very few women aim to be less than 10% body fat such as Roxanne Edwards. Many would consider her body to be abnormal and/or grotesque. In Fact many women are reluctant to try weight lifting as they feel it would make them too muscular or bulky. Women are conjectured to believe they should be Dainty, smaller than men not equal and especially not bigger.
Roxane realizes she is nowhere near “typical” or average woman so she seeks out femininity from alternative sources such as drag queens and transvestites. “...quite elegant and just amazingly feminine without having to have not one breast amongst the”, Roxanne strives to redefine beauty as she is not concerned about a woman's figure, hair or makeup but instead her confidence and the the way in which she carries herself. She can see past superficial. Roxanne at no points mentions that even though she does not meet the beauty standard, that she wants to change and neither does she complain. SHe herself says her best tool to fight is to stay herself and keep competing, which shows her content.
1) Roxanne's bodybuilding provides her with happiness and a reason to not seek approval from anyone else. Whereas Patrick Bateman works out to impress other people.
ReplyDelete2) I think it succeeds at making a debatable assertion because it states how each, Roxanne and Bateman are working out for their own reasons. I suggest making the thesis a more general idea and using Roxanne and Bateman as an example to prove the idea.
3) The paper talks about how Bateman strives for perfection, in particular, his physical appearance. It also talks about how he has this strength and uses it to dominate these women. I would be more clear about why he strives to achieve this "perfect body". With the Roxanne example, it's asserted that "Roxanne strives to redefine beauty". The argument is developed with supporting evidence.
4) I would make a conclusion paragraph that ties Bateman and Roxanne to the thesis, kind of like restate how their reasons to exercise support the thesis. Throughout the paper, the thesis is restated by explaining the person's story. I would probably add more supporting evidence to each of the examples (Bateman and Roxanne).